They are water, dirt, bacteria AND chew resistant beds that can withstand the elements. You can leave them outside, uncovered without any worries that they will be destroyed.
References :
http://www.squidoo.com/crypton-dog-beds

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more
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So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more
References :

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more
References :

Even though some dogs are perfectly happy to sleep in the open (on a patio, for example), this is not enough protection from weather or possible predators.

Anything made of cloth is not a good idea … cloth gets wet and stays wet. In the winter, it freezes … in warm weather it will harbor mold.

A REAL doghouse (preferably elevated a few inches from the ground) with a layer of straw is best.
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They are water, dirt, bacteria AND chew resistant beds that can withstand the elements. You can leave them outside, uncovered without any worries that they will be destroyed.
References :
http://www.squidoo.com/crypton-dog-beds