They are water, dirt, bacteria AND chew resistant beds that can withstand the elements. You can leave them outside, uncovered without any worries that they will be destroyed.

They are water, dirt, bacteria AND chew resistant beds that can withstand the elements. You can leave them outside, uncovered without any worries that they will be destroyed.

They are water, dirt, bacteria AND chew resistant beds that can withstand the elements. You can leave them outside, uncovered without any worries that they will be destroyed.

At the moment, she is totally bored and looking for her ipod.

Taking a deep sigh, she clambered up the stairs and into her room. Listen to music. Great idea! If only she knew where her ipod was. Katie dropped to the ground on her hands and knees and started searching. If she didn’t find it, at least looking for it would waste some time. Her hand crawled in all different directions, skimming over the floor, under the bed, desk, and dresser. She slithered into the lounge room and checked under all the chairs. Finally, she stood up and dug her hand under the pillows, feeling every crevice and corner, but she was nothing but disappointed. She ran her hands over and under the sheets of her bed, and tops of the desk and dresser, but still no ipod. “Mom?” She hollered. “Can you help me look for my ipod?” Still no response. She must be out food shopping or something.

Well, she could check listening to music off for list of things she can’t do. Katie collapsed her worn body onto the cool, wood floor of her bedroom. She lay there in annoyance, her body spread out like a snow angel. Puck trotted over to her and licked her face. “Hehe, stop Puck!” She cried and hugged her dog. “Puck,” She said, bolting up, “Could you help me find my ipod?” She listened for a response, but only heard her dog’s heavy breathing. “Thought not,” She mumbled and sank back down. The boredom was eating away at her. “Okay,” She said aloud, “I’ll make my own music. Help me sing Puck.” The dog bumped his head into her shoulder as Katie hollered a very out of tune version of Love Story. “WE WERE BOTH YOUNG WHEN I FIRST SAW YOU…” Katie chanted. “I CLOSED MY EYES, AND THE FLASHBACK STARTS I’M STANDING THERE. ON A BALCONY OF SUMMER AIR.”
She sang each verse with the loudest tone she could muster up, feeling free and giggly.

So, you chose my answer as Best on your other question so I came to this one to comment and explain my opinion about Visuals in Third Person vs First Person.

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more

At the moment, she is totally bored and looking for her ipod.

Taking a deep sigh, she clambered up the stairs and into her room. Listen to music. Great idea! If only she knew where her ipod was. Katie dropped to the ground on her hands and knees and started searching. If she didn’t find it, at least looking for it would waste some time. Her hand crawled in all different directions, skimming over the floor, under the bed, desk, and dresser. She slithered into the lounge room and checked under all the chairs. Finally, she stood up and dug her hand under the pillows, feeling every crevice and corner, but she was nothing but disappointed. She ran her hands over and under the sheets of her bed, and tops of the desk and dresser, but still no ipod. “Mom?” She hollered. “Can you help me look for my ipod?” Still no response. She must be out food shopping or something.

Well, she could check listening to music off for list of things she can’t do. Katie collapsed her worn body onto the cool, wood floor of her bedroom. She lay there in annoyance, her body spread out like a snow angel. Puck trotted over to her and licked her face. “Hehe, stop Puck!” She cried and hugged her dog. “Puck,” She said, bolting up, “Could you help me find my ipod?” She listened for a response, but only heard her dog’s heavy breathing. “Thought not,” She mumbled and sank back down. The boredom was eating away at her. “Okay,” She said aloud, “I’ll make my own music. Help me sing Puck.” The dog bumped his head into her shoulder as Katie hollered a very out of tune version of Love Story. “WE WERE BOTH YOUNG WHEN I FIRST SAW YOU…” Katie chanted. “I CLOSED MY EYES, AND THE FLASHBACK STARTS I’M STANDING THERE. ON A BALCONY OF SUMMER AIR.”
She sang each verse with the loudest tone she could muster up, feeling free and giggly.

So, you chose my answer as Best on your other question so I came to this one to comment and explain my opinion about Visuals in Third Person vs First Person.

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more

At the moment, she is totally bored and looking for her ipod.

Taking a deep sigh, she clambered up the stairs and into her room. Listen to music. Great idea! If only she knew where her ipod was. Katie dropped to the ground on her hands and knees and started searching. If she didn’t find it, at least looking for it would waste some time. Her hand crawled in all different directions, skimming over the floor, under the bed, desk, and dresser. She slithered into the lounge room and checked under all the chairs. Finally, she stood up and dug her hand under the pillows, feeling every crevice and corner, but she was nothing but disappointed. She ran her hands over and under the sheets of her bed, and tops of the desk and dresser, but still no ipod. “Mom?” She hollered. “Can you help me look for my ipod?” Still no response. She must be out food shopping or something.

Well, she could check listening to music off for list of things she can’t do. Katie collapsed her worn body onto the cool, wood floor of her bedroom. She lay there in annoyance, her body spread out like a snow angel. Puck trotted over to her and licked her face. “Hehe, stop Puck!” She cried and hugged her dog. “Puck,” She said, bolting up, “Could you help me find my ipod?” She listened for a response, but only heard her dog’s heavy breathing. “Thought not,” She mumbled and sank back down. The boredom was eating away at her. “Okay,” She said aloud, “I’ll make my own music. Help me sing Puck.” The dog bumped his head into her shoulder as Katie hollered a very out of tune version of Love Story. “WE WERE BOTH YOUNG WHEN I FIRST SAW YOU…” Katie chanted. “I CLOSED MY EYES, AND THE FLASHBACK STARTS I’M STANDING THERE. ON A BALCONY OF SUMMER AIR.”
She sang each verse with the loudest tone she could muster up, feeling free and giggly.

So, you chose my answer as Best on your other question so I came to this one to comment and explain my opinion about Visuals in Third Person vs First Person.

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more

At the moment, she is totally bored and looking for her ipod.

Taking a deep sigh, she clambered up the stairs and into her room. Listen to music. Great idea! If only she knew where her ipod was. Katie dropped to the ground on her hands and knees and started searching. If she didn’t find it, at least looking for it would waste some time. Her hand crawled in all different directions, skimming over the floor, under the bed, desk, and dresser. She slithered into the lounge room and checked under all the chairs. Finally, she stood up and dug her hand under the pillows, feeling every crevice and corner, but she was nothing but disappointed. She ran her hands over and under the sheets of her bed, and tops of the desk and dresser, but still no ipod. “Mom?” She hollered. “Can you help me look for my ipod?” Still no response. She must be out food shopping or something.

Well, she could check listening to music off for list of things she can’t do. Katie collapsed her worn body onto the cool, wood floor of her bedroom. She lay there in annoyance, her body spread out like a snow angel. Puck trotted over to her and licked her face. “Hehe, stop Puck!” She cried and hugged her dog. “Puck,” She said, bolting up, “Could you help me find my ipod?” She listened for a response, but only heard her dog’s heavy breathing. “Thought not,” She mumbled and sank back down. The boredom was eating away at her. “Okay,” She said aloud, “I’ll make my own music. Help me sing Puck.” The dog bumped his head into her shoulder as Katie hollered a very out of tune version of Love Story. “WE WERE BOTH YOUNG WHEN I FIRST SAW YOU…” Katie chanted. “I CLOSED MY EYES, AND THE FLASHBACK STARTS I’M STANDING THERE. ON A BALCONY OF SUMMER AIR.”
She sang each verse with the loudest tone she could muster up, feeling free and giggly.

So, you chose my answer as Best on your other question so I came to this one to comment and explain my opinion about Visuals in Third Person vs First Person.

So–it doesn’t have anything to do with whether or not it’s first person. It has to do with whether or not it’s in Katie’s Limited Third Person perspective, or in an Omniscient third person. If it’s in Limited Third Person, that means the reader can only see what Katie sees, hear what Katie hears, smell what Katie smells…you get the point. If you’re trying to write in Third Person Limited, it’s actually a weakness when you drift out of Katie’s perspective, and it can be truly Difficult not to add in those extra details–with First Person, it’s much Easier. But that doesn’t mean that when you choose Third Person you don’t have to put in that extra effort to make it right.

BUT, you could also write the book in Omniscient Third Person. That means that the narrator (i.e., you) knows everything that’s happening to everyone, and can go into anyone’s head at any time during the story. For instance, you could tell what Katie’s thinking one paragraph, and tell what her mom is thinking the next–another term for it is Head-Hopping. But I feel like, if you want the reader to truly know what it feels like to be blind Katie, you should stick to Third Limited and avoid visual details.

Anyway, now for this Excerpt…

"Taking a deep sigh" seems like a mix between "Taking a deep breath" and "sighing deeply." But I don’t think you can really "take" a sigh because you’re exhaling, not inhaling.

What do you mean by "her worn body"? Is she sick? Injured? What? (these are rhetorical questions you should clarify in the story–you don’t have to tell me the answers )

"She lay there in annoyance" doesn’t say much about what she’s doing. How does lying somewhere in annoyance look different than lying somewhere in happiness? Also, saying that she’s "spread out like a snow angel" gives a visual from above, so that the reader is looking down at Katie, when really we should be looking through her eyes–up–at the ceiling, for instance.

"she cried" should be lowercase. "she said" should also be lowercase. "she mumbled" should be lowercase.

Are you sure the boredom is eating her?

"she said aloud" should be lowercase, and "aloud" isn’t necessary, because if you say something the reader is going to assume you say it out loud…as oppose to saying "she thought."

"hollered" and "chanted" have different connotations–you may want to think of different verbs. ALSO, if you want to get this published, you’ll need permission from Taylor Swift to use her lyrics. And probably pay money.

That’s it . I personally like the Katie of the second excerpt, because she seems less moody, and it’s particularly admirable for a blind girl to not be moody. But also understandable that she is. So anyway, great job, I hope you post more

Now I have a puppy, who is 1 year old, he is a great little chiwauwau. He usually comes to bed with me at 10pm and sleeps all the way up til 8am like clockwork. He’s very good about peeing, he holds it all through the night and never gives me any trouble. But 3 nights ago he started waking up full of energy at 5 a.m. At first I just thought he had to go potty, so I let him out, and he did go, but then he like ran around the backyard and played. The next night he did the same thing. And now this past night he did it again but I didn’t give in. But it took me about an hour of petting and ear scratching for him to finally fall asleep again.

Why do dogs remember these new habits? It amazes me how precise and consistent it is. But it is super annoying. What could be happening with him that makes him randomly want to wake up so early and be rowdy?

Put the puppy on a lead when he goes out to pee. At the moment you are rewarding his behaviour. Be very low key and quiet when taking him out, at the moment he is training you! Make sure he gets plenty of exercise in the day, so sleeps deeper at night. Don’t pet him or scratch him, or you will be doing this every night